Tuesday, July 27, 2010
Speech #1 Critique- Remember Feedback is a Gift!
Bravo on the first set of speeches! Nice effort in making application to many of the criteria that we have spoken about over the last few weeks! Time to critique! Please post your speech critique in this blog. Be sure to use the feedback sheet with your notes to critique your partner's speech performance. The critique should contain three strengths andd three improvements. Be sure to elaborate with details so your partner understands the effectiveness of their performance and also reads practical advice and suggestions for strengthening their improvements. The comments should include points that include both the delivery of the speech and the research, content of the speech. Remember you are being graded on this blog critique. So, don't forget to elaborate with details. Post should be a minimum of 200 words.
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ReplyDeleteFelicity presented her first speak in communication today overall she did a good job but had a few minor touches that she had to fix. First I am going to critique her positively. Standing in front of the class she spoke in a smooth tone, and she spoke like she was having a regular conversation with someone. She was not just reading off the note cards, she knew her information and barely barley looked down at her note cards. She also has a lot of really good points and examples. One was when she used her grandma. One of her main points was that 20.17% of people ages 55 and up, are addicted to Facebook. So she said that her grandma is 60 years old and is on Facebook all the time.
ReplyDeleteNext she also had really good eye contact. She knew her information she focused on adapting with her audience by using eye contact I thought that she did that well.
When she finished her speech I thought it was almost perfect but there were some problems that she had fix. One was when she forgot or got frustrated because she forgot what she had to say or even when she was moving on to her next point she suck on her teeth. One way she could get rid of that is by practicing the speech in front of a mirror and recording herself. Then she can listen how many times you can hear the sucking of the teeth. Also while in front of the class she tended to get a little shaky and stumbled on her words. She could fix that by taken deep breaths and just relaxing. Lastly was that when she was presenting she might have got nervous so she sped up and spoke really fast. She has to catch herself doing that so she can slow down and present pleasantly and relaxed. Over all I think the speech was great, Good job Felicity!
My speech partner was Jeremy, for our first speech “Did you ever notice that…?” His speech was on the dangers for teens regarding smoking and second hand smoking. Jeremy started off presenting very well. His introduction contained a good personal story regarding his Aunt and how smoking led her to her death. By sharing this story he was able to establish some credibility and capture audience’s attention. Jeremy was able to establish his 3 points quite clearly. He could definitely work that aspect though to improve his presentation. Jeremy’s message behind his speech was well understood. His speech contained some sort of flow. His voice projection as well the uses of language and his sources were good. His best strengths about his presentation were how he maintained a very conversational tone all throughout the speech. He also seemed to know what he was talking about. Add his excellent voice projection.
ReplyDeleteThere are some things that Jeremy could work on and those are his eye contact, his note card reliance, and his preparation time. All throughout the speech it seemed as if Jeremy look down at his cards just a little too much. He can get rid of this bad habit if he got to practice or prepare a lot more before his speech. On the other hand Jeremy seemed to use words like “like, umm” throughout his speech. Honestly all of his presentation problems could be corrected with proper and longer preparation before his speech. Overall you did a great job Jeremy!
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ReplyDeleteToday we did our first speech which was Did You Ever Notice That? My speech partner was Joe Arias and his speech was on Steroids. He did a very nice job presenting it, there were just minor things that could be better. First in the beginning he was to quiet and monotone. He should have spoke up a little more so that the whole class could hear him. Next was the eye contact, he needs to look at the audience more. He read off his note cards a lot and did not engage his audience in what he was speaking about. He also had his hand in his pockets most of the time. The last thing that he needs to work on is his facial expressions. In the beginning of his speech he looked very nervous and scared but towards the end he started to get comfortable and smile more. A way to work on his weaknesses so that his next speech could be better is to relax and become comfortable with his audience because nobody is there to judge him.On the other hand he was very conversational and I'm sure everyone understood what he was speaking about. He had great resources and he knew the information in which he was presenting to us. The main thing I remember about his speech was 1988 Olympics Ben Johnson broke the world record by using Steroids. When people saw that he did this so easy by using Steroids all the kids and other people wanted to use them and then they became popular. His speech was very interesting and I learned a lot about steroids that I never knew before. The video at the end was very interesting!!
ReplyDeleteToday Du'Anne finally gave his speech in intro to speech communication. I will start off by saying that he did an okay job. It was not the best speech, but it could have been way better. There is a lot of room for improvement. Du'Anne had a pretty good topic, it was very interesting and could have been a lot better. I will now go to the bad critique that I am sure will help him do better in his next speech. Du'Anne had to connectives which caused his speech to sound like it was all one long point. He has to stop depending on the note cards and stop breathing heavily whenever he is done with a point. Keep your head up Du'Anne, we want to see you, I am sure the note cards do not want to see you. I did not hear any sources at all. You have to stop pausing and saying "ummm" after every sentence. You have a good speech on paper, next time Du'Anne has to make sure he practices more before he comes into class to present.
ReplyDeleteMy partner Matthew decided to do his “Did you ever notice that…” speech on Tourette’s syndrome. Matthew had a lot of great sources and ideas to make his speech believable and a great learning experience for the audience, but he lacked delivery. He had the creditability that is necessary for any speech and the resources that would back up any information he presented to the audience. The missing factors within his speech were variety in pitch or tone, and eye contact. Although he spoke very clearly during his speech, because of lack of projection it was difficult to understand the information he presented. He seemed uncomfortable standing in front of an audience with his hands in his pockets. He expressed his discomfort when he went closest to the blackboard (which is further from the audience) and began reading from his note cards occasionally glancing up at the audience. Next time Matthew should try to focus less on the cards and more on the audience. He should channel the nervousness that everyone tends to feel before a speech and make it work for him. He can do this by not expressing out loud at anytime that he is nervous, because when you acknowledge your nervousness it can sometimes hinder your performance. He already understands all of the prep for a speech as far as research and content, he just needs to work on his delivery. Remember it’s not the fact that you’re nervous that counts, but how you react even though you are nervous.
ReplyDeleteOn July 29, 2010 my speech partner Remzy Jemal, derived his speech on Did you ever notice that the Relationship Between the Quality of Sleep and the Behaviors of College Students? Three of Remzy strengths were the fact that he knew his information well and he was able to use good examples. He was also able to cite his information with good sources, which gave him credibility and made the audience want to pay attention. He also picked a topic that he was able to relate to class and the fact that we all are not getting enough sleep and that it’s only going to get worse. Remzy also interacted with his audience and had them laughing and engaged with his speech.
ReplyDeleteThree improvements that he can work on would be his voice projection as Professor McManimon stated. She was unable to understand him from the back of the classroom. I believe that in order for Remzy to be able to work on his voice projection he has to practice his speech longer. First just getting to know the information then working on his voice projection. Another improvement that I recommend is that he should not rely on his index cards so much and have more eye contact with the audience. One piece of advice that I would give is that if you don’t want to look at the class look at the back of the room. He should find a spot that he can fix his eyes on and once in a while look at the spot when feel as if you’re not looking up. Remzy needs to also improve his conclusion I think that he had strong points and he just needed to find a way to sum all of the points together. One piece of advice that I would give is to go back to your thesis and ask yourself what do I want them to remember about my speech.
Yesterday was our first day of the “Did You Ever Notice That? “ Speech and my partner was Walter Saravia. His speech was based on how dogs have human emotions and how it affects their mood. His introduction was good – his thesis statement actually pertained to his whole speech, his attention grabber caught my attention, and he clearly stated his main point’s one after the other. Walter eased on in with following the message; he didn’t just jump from point to point like I did. Walter’s credibility was very good as far as vocally, visually, and the use of language. His voice was at a fair level and he didn’t rush with his speech. He stood still, didn’t walk around, made acceptable eye contact, and the only time he looked down at his flashcards was when he needed to sight something.
ReplyDeleteFor the majority of the speech everything was good, but Walter still showed some problems while in front of the class. He was blowing his breathe, touching his eyebrow a lot, sweating, scratching his face as if he was itchy. He also forgot a couple of words so he paused for just a bit. All of those complications were obvious signs of nervousness and anxiety but Walter still hung in there and made it to the finish line without any real problems. My improvements for Walter are to stop touching/scratching his face so much, stop fidgeting & use more hand gestures, and actually practice with your speech partner (Duanne Neal). Good job though buddy.
The first speech the topic was “Did You Ever Notice…?” and my partner was Bridget. She had an excellent speech. First of all she had a strong intro. With the video she used she had a really good wow factor. Second all of her main points were clearly stated during her speech. She said all of her points well because she used good volume, rate and pitch. I was the third person in my row and I could hear her clearly. Visually she was also good. She made good eye contact during here whole speech because she knew her information. She integrated her sources well into her speech. To tie it all up she had a nice conclusion. It ended everything perfectly. It also proposed a question that had the audience thinking and even a little scared about their own lives.
ReplyDeleteAll in all it was a great speech. After her speech I feel like I know about the topic and I am well aware of it. Although she does needs to improve on two things for her next speech. First she rocks a little but during her speech. It was something to calm her nerves, but it was defiantly noticeable. The only other thing she needs improvement on is looking around the room. She did make good eye contact, but it was one in one spot. She needs to look around, but still stand in one spot. Bridget did a very good speech and as long as she works on her next speech it will be flawless.
My speech partner Candace did a very good job putting together her speech, researching her topic, and her final delivery was, in my opinion, informative and well received. Candace’s topic was on the EOP program itself. When she told me she choose our EOP summer session and its staff to do her speech on it was very interesting; especially since it comes in direct contact to all of us being EOP students ourselves.
ReplyDeleteThere are very few things that I noticed that Candace needed to work on. I did notice she swayed back and forth while she talked and it was kind of distracting. She also seemed to be looking down at her note cards just a little too long but that did not happened very often. In my opinion, the time that she put in preparation for her speech really showed yesterday.
The good thing about Candace’s presentation is that she stayed away from many of the mistakes made by some of the others that went before her. One of the biggest pluses that she had going for her during her speech was her eye contact with the audience. Not many people had eye contact like hers. Her voice was steady and confident, she went out and interviewed actual EOP staff members and then quoted them. She also had good quotes and smiled throughout the speech’s entirety. These things made her presentation engaging and easy to connect to making her speech one of the best in the class.
My partner for our first speech is Shayanna Goffney. The speech topic was “Did you ever notice that...” She opened with a strong introduction and she clearly stated her three points. People were able to understand her because of the projection of her voice. She was talking at a good rate and she pronounced her words clearly and well. Her voice was not monotone, she made it have a conversational flow and she tried to draw people in with her verbal skills and gestures. She looked as if she was going to read off her index cards in the beginning. But she changed once she was not nervous. She leaned away from the flash cards after the introduction. She did hand movements and gestures as a part of her credibility. Throughout the speech she had very good transitions. The overall speech had a nice flow. She introduced her sources very well and everyone was able to understand her. She used an extensive amount of vocabulary. She seemed like she knew her topic well. I was able to tell that’s she knew her topic and practiced her speech. I believe her speech was very well, but the one thing I would change is that she stated “um…” often. Many people say “like” or “um” in their speech as a sign of nervousness. She also crossed her legs which also showed her nervousness. Even though there were small mistakes, the overall speech was great. Good job Shayanna!
ReplyDeleteMy speech partner was Geno. Geno’s overall speech was well presented. His introduction was strong. The minor mistake he had with his introduction was his main points. They were unclear and hard to follow. I couldn’t tell when he was moving from point to point. Since it was hard moving from point to point, the ease in following the message was difficult. His speaker’s credibility was good. Vocally, his volume, rate, pitch, and articulation were all good. He did well presenting these things. Visually, his eye contact and stance were good. These two things really stood out for him. His gestures set him back. His hands were glued to the note cards. Next time he needs to get his hands more involved with his speech. His use of language was good. He used words appropriate to present his topic without us being bewildered or confused. His use of sources was another setback. It seemed he only used the one source, your husband. We need more of a broadened selection of sources. We needed to hear that the info was not only correct through your husband. His conclusion was good, but it could have been better. He needed that sentence to tie his audience in with the topic. His ability to give the information I needed about the issue was okay. He had a lot of information to present; it was all just unclear and unorganized. Overall, Geno presented a good speech. Things that stood out positively were his eye contact and posture. They were good things, and he needs to keep them the same in his next speech. Things that stood out negatively were his gestures and delivery. He needs to work on these two things for his next speech. His next speech will be very good if he puts in the effort, time, and preparation. Good job Geno!
ReplyDeleteMy speech partner Jennifer Lynch did her speech on the topic “Did you ever notice that tattoos and piercings are addictive?” The purpose of the speech was to inform so she did a good job making it informative. Her three strengths were that the points she put across were clear and were right on target. Another strength she had was that she had solid eye contact with the audience. Additionally the connectives she used to transition from one point to another were outstanding. She needs to improve on the time she spends looking down on at the cards. She knows what she talks about but she still looks at the card just as an assurance. Another thing she should improve on is using her hand to talk. We worked on minimizing her using her hands in practice but it wasn’t enough. It was much worse before; it is a working progress. One more thing she could improve on is some of the explanations to the points she made were too lengthy. She might lose people’s interests if she elongates her explanations. Even though she stated her interviewed sources very well, she needs to improve the way she states other sources to add to her creditability. Her outline was done very well. Her central idea gave us an idea of what the speech was about, so it was good.
ReplyDeleteJohn was my speech partner for the first speech “Did you ever notice that…” His topic was how laughter was essential to your health. John started off his speech very strong by asking rhetorical questions. It caught the audience’s attention very easily. His three main points were very clear because he stated them in the introduction. He held very good eye contact and had a conversational tone. He knew the information well so he looked professional. He gave very good sources throughout the entire speech. His conclusion was very solid and wrapped up his speech well.
ReplyDeleteJohn had many strengths throughout his speech. His transitions were good and made the speech flow. He used many sources throughout the speech that seemed accurate. It made it easy to believe that his thesis was true. He also presented them in the correct way. Another strength was that he made it relatable to his audience. He used examples that adolescences could relate too. John only needs a few improvements to make his speech perfect. He didn’t use his hands a lot and was rocking back and forth. His body language was nervous and the audience was picking up on that. If he relaxed and used his hands more the speech would be more conversational. Also he didn’t smile a lot throughout the speech. If he relaxed and smiled more it would get rid of that nervousness. John tone was very professional. Everyone knows that John is a funny and charismatic guy. If he used some of his charisma in his speech it would make him stand out. Overall John did a very good job. If he improves these few things he can be a perfect presenter.
My speech partner Denise did a good job over all. She has a couple things she needs to touch up on but other than that, I thought it was great. I felt that she provided a lot of good detail and examples to explain her topic on the young driver’s decal law. She explained how this decal law could be used to actually harm the drivers. She explained how the police could be discriminative towards you because of the decal and she gave a first hand experience as an example about a time she was pulled over. She also talked about how pedophiles and criminals could target young adults because of this decal. She gave great credibility throughout her main points and supported them well. There were a couple things she could work on. For example, she used a lot of filler words in between sentences and topics such as like and umm. She was very fidgety and kept her legs crossed pretty much the whole speech. She kept some good eye contact but at some points in the speech she didn’t look at the audience at all. I felt that the audience could really relate to her topic because some of them have to follow this law. Her projection and tone of voice was great but I only heard a couple connectives in between subjects. Over all I think she did a great job for a first speech and I know that she is going to perform well on the next one. Job well done Denise Cullinan!
ReplyDeleteMy partner was Steven. Steven's speech was very good, and he did better than I thought he would based on us practicing. Steven's topic was cars, and I was so surprised that he knew so much about them. While he was presenting, it was evident that he knew exactly what he was talking about the whole time, and his sources were good as well. One thing I would suggest Steve works on for his next speech is his nervousness. He was fidgety, and his voice pitch kept changing the more nervous he got. One thing that I can say I loved about his speech was the fact that he definitely kept the audience interested the whole time with his facts. Another thing I liked that he did was he incorporated a story about him and his grandfather. Overall, his speech was very good, and I enjoyed being his partner because he was very helpful when we practiced for our speeches. Keep up the good work Steven!!!!!!!
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